Icy's Blunt Pencil: Friday Flash

Friday, 5 November 2010

Friday Flash - The Promise

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21 comments:

Sulci Collective said...: oooh voodoo in suburbia. Nice. Points up a difference in men and women I feel...

marc nash; 5 November 2010 at 08:56
Sam said...: Well, he had fair warning so he's no-one to blame but himself. I rather like Rosie, and that last sentence is a cracker!; 5 November 2010 at 09:00
Carrie Clevenger said...: He totally got what he deserved! Bastard. Voodoo like you do, this was fun.; 5 November 2010 at 10:06
Crybbe666 said...: Who do hoodoo like you do? Not too many people. Enjoyed this, would loved to have seen Fiona's reaction to her cousin's deeds.; 5 November 2010 at 10:25
Icy Sedgwick said...: Marc - Hadn't done voodoo before so I thought I'd give it a go.

Sam - Exactly! Mitchell brings it all on himself by being a dick.

Carrie - I was going to do a photo to go with it but didn't want to put pins in any of my toys.

Paul - I doubt Fiona would have been impressed but Rosie would have no doubt "dealt with" that situation too...; 5 November 2010 at 10:52
Laura Eno said...: This was sweeeeet! Rosie is my kind of hero.; 5 November 2010 at 11:59
Marisa Birns said...: Rosie rocks! I know that Fiona would rather have Mitchell than his fortune but, still . . .

Wish I had a cousin like Rosie. :D; 5 November 2010 at 12:21
Anonymous said...: Oh this is fun Icy! So glad Mitchell got what was coming to him. Very well told story.; 5 November 2010 at 13:39
Tony Noland said...: Damn, this completely cements that old advice about checking on what kind of in-laws you're marrying into.

Nice one.; 5 November 2010 at 15:00
Eric J. Krause said...: Very cool story! Creepy. You certainly don't want to mess with voodoo. Loved the last paragraph.; 5 November 2010 at 17:41
Anonymous said...: Ah, yes, Rosie is splendid. Everyone needs a Rosie in their corner.

What a great story, Icy. Thoroughly loved it!; 5 November 2010 at 17:41
John Wiswell said...: I chuckled at the final line. That's a really good one, Icy. Go Rosie!; 5 November 2010 at 19:14
Anonymous said...: Well wikkid.
Loved the set up at the wedding with all the kissing and hand shaking, being able to slip in the subtle threat as a joke.
And I agree that the last line is a cracker.
Adam B @revhappiness; 5 November 2010 at 20:41
Raven Corinn Carluk said...: Excellent. One must keep one's promises.; 5 November 2010 at 22:15
AidanF said...: I like the way you end the wedding scene with the realization that this isn't an empty threat and the story keeps it's promise by visiting Michell with what he deserves.; 6 November 2010 at 02:25
Steve Green said...: Nice retribution tale Icy, I had a feeling it wasn't just an empty threat. :)

The next time a woman ruffles my hair, I'm gonna make sure she doesn't actually TAKE any of it. :); 6 November 2010 at 13:27
Alan W. Davidson said...: I like that. 'The Angel of Vengeance". I liked the voodoo doll aspect to this.

That reminds me of the threat my aunt made to her future son-in-law when he became engaged to her daughter. Except I think the phrase, "...cut your effin throat..." was in there somewhere.; 6 November 2010 at 14:46
Kath said...: Love the way you end both sections, first with her tucking a handful of Mitchell's hair into her purse and then having the Angel of Vengeance look back at her in the rear view mirror. Brilliantly done! Every Fiona needs a Rosie in their corner if they're crazy enough to go ahead and marry a Mitchell. Loved this.; 7 November 2010 at 20:58
Harry said...: So, what? No retribution for the pushy sorority sisters or golf club buddies?

Rosie rocks and so do you!; 8 November 2010 at 16:01
Anonymous said...: Fantastic story, Icy! The writing sucked me in from the beginning. Great job.; 10 November 2010 at 22:21
Anonymous said...: How cool I love your storie xp; 11 November 2010 at 00:56