Friday, 2 July 2010

Friday Flash - Unforgettable

This story is currently down as I have entered it into a competition!

26 comments:

Laura Eno said...

Beautiful! I could smell the dust...

Marisa Birns said...

Wow, such vivid description! Could just see the ballroom and its beauty, dust and all.

Lovely story of ghostly nostalgia!

Icy Sedgwick said...

Thank you! I just thought I hadn't done a descriptive piece for a while. Glad you liked it :-)

John Wiswell said...

Nat King Cole makes the best sales pitches. Whatever he's singing about, I want.

Carrie said...

Oh this was luscious. I loved the ghosts. Magnificent.

Lena S. said...

This is a lovely little piece! I like how the ballroom itself is described as a character. The memory fading back to reality is my favorite part of the story.

Draco Torre said...

I want that house! Lovely story full of enchanting description.

Benjamin Solah said...

This was a really powerful and engrossing piece. I loved the images you created.

Gracie said...

Really beautiful, Icy. Perfect, rich descriptions. I could hear the music, the agent's heels, felt the dust, everything.

I'd take it, too. Just wonderful.

carols said...

Great written. I like your writing style. It was very clear and concise and i enjoyed reading the entire article.
real estate agents in london

Sulci Collective said...

Lifting the dust sheets from her memories - very nice imagery

Marc Nash

Icy Sedgwick said...

Glad everyone liked it. I'd love a ballroom, though preferably one with fewer cobwebs.

Maria A. Kelly said...

Nicely crafted story...your descriptive narrative is kick ass. I love it! I want to go dancing with that ghostly pale man. Romantic and gothic and dramatic all in one.

Sam said...

Soulful, tinged with sadness, and oh so beautifully written.

afullnessinbrevity said...

There is a beautiful other-worldly feel to the story, evoking memories of childhood and memories of an age when manners and chivalry promoted a more civilised age. The description is so evocative and visual. Beautiful.
Adam B

Icy Sedgwick said...

@Maria - He's a gent, isn't he?

@Sam - Sad, yes, but at least the place isn't being gutted so it can be turned into luxury flats.

@Adam - That means a lot to me, coming from you!

Eric J. Krause said...

Excellent story! Loved the description in it. Easy to see why she was sold on the house.

admin said...

This is the reason I read. Once in a hundred stories something comes along that is so beautiful, so perfect that it takes me beyond merely the reading of words from a screen. Seriously, this is one of the best tales my eyes have ever danced with on my laptop. Thank you.

runbeagle said...

Beautiful writing - evocative and dreamy with a hint of the melancholy. Thanks for sharing :)

Icy Sedgwick said...

I am so pleased that people are enjoying this!

ganymeder said...

Wonderfully descriptive and nostalgic.

Alan W. Davidson said...

That was a real gem, Icy. Lots of memorable, desriptive lines there. These ones really stood out for me:

"The ballroom opens out before me, a cavernous space of silence and memories."

"Dust motes dance where once there was magic."

G.P. Ching said...

LOVED IT! This was nostalgic for me but I also read supernatural into it. I could see this as part of a longer piece about a medium or a haunting. Good stuff here.

Icy Sedgwick said...

I'm so glad you liked it. I was tempted to make it longer but I didn't want to spoil it.

T.J. McIntyre said...

Nicely done!

Pamila Payne said...

What a beautiful story. Your prose is lyrical, and dreamy and I wish I could say, "I'll take it." to that estate agent. I've always wanted a house with a haunted ballroom.

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