Friday, 6 April 2012

Friday Flash - Talent Show

Simon Powell sat at the table in the village hall, and motioned for quiet. The dull hubbub of voices in the audience died away, leaving behind a silence so pregnant it almost gave birth on the floor. A young man stumbled forwards onto the stage, forced on by an assistant in the wings. Simon recognised him as Edmund Rock, the butcher's boy.

"Hello there, Ed! What are you going to do for us this evening?" asked Adrina Sayle. She sat beside Simon, draped in fur and smelling of mothballs and violets. Simon thought she was a little overdressed to judge a local talent contest, but Adrina didn't get out much these days.

"I, er, I-" Edmund broke off to dash across the stage and into the wings nearest Simon and Adrina. Faces twisted and handkerchiefs were held to mouths as the sound of retching filled the hall. Simon waved to the assistants backstage. Nervous contestants shuffled among themselves.

A girl pushed her way to the front of the gaggle and strode onto the stage. A hush fell across the gathered villagers as they recognised Melandra. Her bushy hair wafted in the faint breeze from an open window near the stage. She sucked at her crooked teeth and stared at the judges with her mismatched eyes.

"Is that the girl from the beach?" whispered Adrina. Simon nodded. The whole village knew, and avoided, the old beachcomber's hut in Piper's Cove. Parents told their children tales of a mad old witch who would eat their pudgy feet, and even the village drunkards gave the hut a wide berth. Apart from the fishermen, people largely stayed away from the whole stretch of coastline. It wasn't safe.

Melandra cleared her throat. Simon jumped, and fought to regain his composure. Ripples of unease spread throughout the audience. The tension hummed so loudly that Simon wondered if one of the boys backstage was practicing the cello.

"Yes, dear, what were you planning to do for us?" asked Adrina. She pasted a false smile on her face, the lines deepening around her scarlet mouth.

"I wanted to sing for you tonight." Melandra's voice grated on Simon. He saw Adrina suppress a shudder out of the corner of his eye.

"Very well, Melandra. When you're ready."

"This song is for my mother, who cannot be here tonight," said Melandra.

"I'm sure she's here in spirit, dear," simpered Adrina.

"She is closer than you know," replied Melandra. She glanced at the stuffed siren above the village hall doors. Simon caught the eye of the talent show host - also the man who harpooned the siren. Reuben Fens spread his hands wide and shrugged. Outsiders often condemned the villagers for their attacks against the sirens but they didn’t know, couldn’t know, what it was like to fear that mournful wail every night.

Before anyone else could speak, Melandra pushed her shoulders back and forced herself to stand straight. She opened her mouth and launched into her song. Simon's eyes widened to hear the liquid notes slide through the air, tumbling over one another like flakes in a snowstorm. Gasps and exclamations of amazement quivered among the audience.

Simon tried to lean sideways to speak to Adrina, but couldn't move. He forced his eyes downwards, and saw his hands folded on the desk where he'd left them. He looked to his right. Adrina sat bolt upright, her face frozen in a mask of amazement. He couldn't see the audience, but the only sound in the hall was that of Melandra's silvery song.

A siren song.

Simon's heart hammered in his chest but his hands refused to follow his commands. His body remained rigid, unable to move. All feeling in his tongue had gone, and the warning died in the back of his throat. Panic fluttered its shimmering wings at the edge of his mind.

The windows flew open and a cold wind ripped through the hall, tearing the flames from the oil lamps. Simon stared into the sudden darkness, and saw only the silvery outline of Melandra, painted in moonlight. The doors of the hall burst open, and screeches from the depths of damnation itself filled the air.

Simon wanted to close his eyes and his ears against the wet tearing sounds behind him, but Melandra’s sisters brought their retribution to the whole village. It was their sole act of mercy that he didn’t feel a thing as they tore him apart.

18 comments:

storytreasury said...

Ohhh I like. I can't blame the sirens really, but I also kind of feel sorry for the boy.

Helen said...

Oh there's nothing like a good dose of revenge! The lesson don't go harpooning Sirens, they don't like it. ^_^

Good story!

Tim VanSant Writes said...

Now that's what I call talent. [You and the siren.]

Peter Newman said...

Is this a dream given form? Fun idea. I like the idea of a silence nearly giving birth.

Sulci Collective said...

if only we could really do this to talent show judges. Very nice take on the song of the siren. Particularly intrigued by your choice of names for the characters - would love to know how and why you opted for them?

marc nash

Larry Kollar said...

Nicely done! Loved the little touches of humor in here that led to The Twist. As it is written, payback's a b**ch! I knew something was about to go down when Melandra said "She's closer than you know." :-)

One technical comment — poor Edmund seems to be a throwaway character. Maybe the butcher's son should be butchered in turn? The dark humor in that would have fit very well with the rest of the story.

Tony Noland said...

Ah, beware the way you treat subjugated minorities. Either be respectful and inclusive, or wipe them out to the very last one.

Steve Green said...

Oh, what a turn up it would be for Melandra to audition for BGT this weekend, it would certainly give the audience something worth shrieking at for a change. :)

modernscheherzade said...

Simon Cowell should have been in that audience:) No reason - he's so mean and always right. Enjoyed the story the retribution felt right - enjoyed the vivid imagery - the wicked witch on the prowl for pudgy children's feet etc.

Aidan Fritz said...

I like how you've used the siren mythos here and the way you captured the helplessness once the song begins.

John Wiswell said...

What a gruesome end, Icy! And strong sense of narration all the way to the dismemberment.

Michael Tate said...

I read "Simon Powell" as "Simon Cowell." Was that supposed to be a play on words there?

Also, loved all the metaphors and similes. I wish I was as good at them as you are. (This piece in particular was wonderful!)

brainhaze said...

Superb hahaha. Revenge is sweet and a nice twist on these talent shows (which I do admit to watching!)
And I really love the word 'hubbub'-awesome!

jackkholt said...

You're not a BGT or X-Factor fan then!

The "silence so pregnant.." line really caught my eye, too. Not sure where you got it from, but I like it!

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afullnessinbrevity said...

The second sentence gave me a real giggle, but overall the whole piece is fantastic as always. And the sound of wet tearing is gruesome yet wonderfully understated.
Adam B @revhappiness

Katherine Hajer said...

Susan Boyle eat your heart out...

I liked how the atmosphere was built up in this one, and the small-town attitudes were drawn in beautifully.

Icy Sedgwick said...

Glad everyone enjoyed this. And yes, that was a riff on Simon Cowell!

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