Icy's Blunt Pencil: Friday Flash

Friday 21 October 2011

Friday Flash - The Stripper

This post has been taken down as the story is now out for submission - wish me luck!

22 comments:

Anonymous said...: I liked where you took this. First impressions can be misleading. It was nice that her friend was the voice of reason.; 21 October 2011 at 19:56
Sulci Collective said...: His helmet is EXACTLY what they should be looking at.

Good, clean fun!

marc Nash; 21 October 2011 at 19:56
Anonymous said...: Well, well... you already know that I love this piece! Great job!; 21 October 2011 at 20:19
Anonymous said...: What a cool story. The things we do for love, but I'm not sure I'd be going that far :) Wonder if it's a magic helmet he's wearing?
Adam B @revhappiness; 21 October 2011 at 20:55
Anonymous said...: Ah...the things we do for love. Fun story this week, Icy. :); 21 October 2011 at 20:58
Larry Kollar said...: Wow, what an entertaining and (in the end) happy story! He was doing it for her.; 21 October 2011 at 22:19
Anonymous said...: A true modern love story. Beautiful. (I was hoping she'd watch and enjoy his routine, though. I wouldn't be able to resist looking!); 21 October 2011 at 23:14
Steve Green said...: I hope she gets some of the benefits from them gym workouts while they're in the Seychelles. :); 22 October 2011 at 00:28
Heath Lowrance said...: Another great story, and it gives me some ideas about how to earn a little extra money... or, um, maybe not...; 22 October 2011 at 00:41
Tim VanSant Writes said...: Let's hear it for historically accurate stripper's costumes! And happy endings, of course. [Why does that sound dirty all of a sudden?]; 22 October 2011 at 00:45
Unknown said...: Very sweet. I liked the weary attitude of Penny and Viv contrasted with Yasmin who is excited over the stripper.; 22 October 2011 at 02:29
Helen A. Howell said...: Aww sweet and funny! Nice story - it reminded me of the time I went to a house hen party and unbeknown to me a mail stripper appeared - called hot rod - he stripped all the way, that was years ago now.....; 22 October 2011 at 03:14
Helen A. Howell said...: Oops I typed mail instead of male - how does one do that!; 22 October 2011 at 03:14
Anonymous said...: I can't believe I didn't see that coming Icy,d especially considering the twist was more in the middle than the end - what a great, heartwarming story!

I was reminded of my bachelorette party - a friend at the time, who was a stripper, hired a stripper for me and I didn't know until afterwards that he was her husband. Thankfully, being so in love with my fiance', I didn't embarrass myself by oozing all over him. :); 22 October 2011 at 14:19
Icy Sedgwick said...: I originally submitted it to the 100 Stories for Queensland but it didn't make the cut, so I'm glad people have still enjoyed this story anyway.; 22 October 2011 at 15:21
Stephen said...: Ha! He's lucky to have such an understanding woman. Even if I had a second honeymoon in the works, I wouldn't be out of the doghouse in time to enjoy it. A funny story, Icy. I really enjoyed the little lines you threw in to spice it up.; 23 October 2011 at 06:02
Dorothy F. Shaw said...: Very sweet and completely unexpected!; 23 October 2011 at 09:44
Craig Smith said...: Sweet story. And it shows you that it's always best to let someone explain before jumping to conclusions.; 23 October 2011 at 19:14
Tony Noland said...: It could certainly be worse. He could have been doing online stock trading as a second job.; 23 October 2011 at 20:53
Chuck Allen said...: I love the awkward moment when he first shows up to dance! And I love the happy ending.; 23 October 2011 at 23:14
Cat Russell said...: A happy ending! How shocking! :); 25 October 2011 at 03:40
liminalfiction said...: Now there's a story that wouldn't end as happily if the genders were reversed (is that a sexist thought, or just a realistic one?). Loved this story, particularly that the husband/stripper turned out to have good intentions.; 25 October 2011 at 04:24