Friday, 21 October 2011

Friday Flash - The Stripper

This post has been taken down as the story is now out for submission - wish me luck!

22 comments:

laradunning said...

I liked where you took this. First impressions can be misleading. It was nice that her friend was the voice of reason.

Sulci Collective said...

His helmet is EXACTLY what they should be looking at.

Good, clean fun!

marc Nash

thirteenthdimension said...

Well, well... you already know that I love this piece! Great job!

afullnessinbrevity said...

What a cool story. The things we do for love, but I'm not sure I'd be going that far :) Wonder if it's a magic helmet he's wearing?
Adam B @revhappiness

daniellelapaglia said...

Ah...the things we do for love. Fun story this week, Icy. :)

FARfetched said...

Wow, what an entertaining and (in the end) happy story! He was doing it for her.

louisebroadbentfiction said...

A true modern love story. Beautiful. (I was hoping she'd watch and enjoy his routine, though. I wouldn't be able to resist looking!)

Steve Green said...

I hope she gets some of the benefits from them gym workouts while they're in the Seychelles. :)

Heath said...

Another great story, and it gives me some ideas about how to earn a little extra money... or, um, maybe not...

Tim VanSant Writes said...

Let's hear it for historically accurate stripper's costumes! And happy endings, of course. [Why does that sound dirty all of a sudden?]

Aidan Fritz said...

Very sweet. I liked the weary attitude of Penny and Viv contrasted with Yasmin who is excited over the stripper.

Helen said...

Aww sweet and funny! Nice story - it reminded me of the time I went to a house hen party and unbeknown to me a mail stripper appeared - called hot rod - he stripped all the way, that was years ago now.....

Helen said...

Oops I typed mail instead of male - how does one do that!

theothersideofdeanna said...

I can't believe I didn't see that coming Icy,d especially considering the twist was more in the middle than the end - what a great, heartwarming story!

I was reminded of my bachelorette party - a friend at the time, who was a stripper, hired a stripper for me and I didn't know until afterwards that he was her husband. Thankfully, being so in love with my fiance', I didn't embarrass myself by oozing all over him. :)

Icy Sedgwick said...

I originally submitted it to the 100 Stories for Queensland but it didn't make the cut, so I'm glad people have still enjoyed this story anyway.

Stephen said...

Ha! He's lucky to have such an understanding woman. Even if I had a second honeymoon in the works, I wouldn't be out of the doghouse in time to enjoy it. A funny story, Icy. I really enjoyed the little lines you threw in to spice it up.

Wookies Girl said...

Very sweet and completely unexpected!

Craig Smith said...

Sweet story. And it shows you that it's always best to let someone explain before jumping to conclusions.

Tony Noland said...

It could certainly be worse. He could have been doing online stock trading as a second job.

Chuck Allen said...

I love the awkward moment when he first shows up to dance! And I love the happy ending.

ganymeder said...

A happy ending! How shocking! :)

Liminal Fiction said...

Now there's a story that wouldn't end as happily if the genders were reversed (is that a sexist thought, or just a realistic one?). Loved this story, particularly that the husband/stripper turned out to have good intentions.

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