Friday, 21 October 2011

Friday Flash - The Stripper

This post has been taken down as the story is now out for submission - wish me luck!
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22 comments:

  1. Anonymous21 October 2011 at 19:56

    I liked where you took this. First impressions can be misleading. It was nice that her friend was the voice of reason.

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  2. Sulci Collective21 October 2011 at 19:56

    His helmet is EXACTLY what they should be looking at.

    Good, clean fun!

    marc Nash

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  3. Anonymous21 October 2011 at 20:19

    Well, well... you already know that I love this piece! Great job!

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  4. Anonymous21 October 2011 at 20:55

    What a cool story. The things we do for love, but I'm not sure I'd be going that far :) Wonder if it's a magic helmet he's wearing?
    Adam B @revhappiness

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  5. Anonymous21 October 2011 at 20:58

    Ah...the things we do for love. Fun story this week, Icy. :)

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  6. Larry Kollar21 October 2011 at 22:19

    Wow, what an entertaining and (in the end) happy story! He was doing it for her.

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  7. Anonymous21 October 2011 at 23:14

    A true modern love story. Beautiful. (I was hoping she'd watch and enjoy his routine, though. I wouldn't be able to resist looking!)

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  8. Steve Green22 October 2011 at 00:28

    I hope she gets some of the benefits from them gym workouts while they're in the Seychelles. :)

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  9. Heath Lowrance22 October 2011 at 00:41

    Another great story, and it gives me some ideas about how to earn a little extra money... or, um, maybe not...

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  10. Tim VanSant Writes22 October 2011 at 00:45

    Let's hear it for historically accurate stripper's costumes! And happy endings, of course. [Why does that sound dirty all of a sudden?]

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  11. Unknown22 October 2011 at 02:29

    Very sweet. I liked the weary attitude of Penny and Viv contrasted with Yasmin who is excited over the stripper.

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  12. Helen A. Howell22 October 2011 at 03:14

    Aww sweet and funny! Nice story - it reminded me of the time I went to a house hen party and unbeknown to me a mail stripper appeared - called hot rod - he stripped all the way, that was years ago now.....

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  13. Helen A. Howell22 October 2011 at 03:14

    Oops I typed mail instead of male - how does one do that!

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  14. Anonymous22 October 2011 at 14:19

    I can't believe I didn't see that coming Icy,d especially considering the twist was more in the middle than the end - what a great, heartwarming story!

    I was reminded of my bachelorette party - a friend at the time, who was a stripper, hired a stripper for me and I didn't know until afterwards that he was her husband. Thankfully, being so in love with my fiance', I didn't embarrass myself by oozing all over him. :)

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  15. Icy Sedgwick22 October 2011 at 15:21

    I originally submitted it to the 100 Stories for Queensland but it didn't make the cut, so I'm glad people have still enjoyed this story anyway.

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  16. Stephen23 October 2011 at 06:02

    Ha! He's lucky to have such an understanding woman. Even if I had a second honeymoon in the works, I wouldn't be out of the doghouse in time to enjoy it. A funny story, Icy. I really enjoyed the little lines you threw in to spice it up.

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  17. Dorothy F. Shaw23 October 2011 at 09:44

    Very sweet and completely unexpected!

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  18. Craig Smith23 October 2011 at 19:14

    Sweet story. And it shows you that it's always best to let someone explain before jumping to conclusions.

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  19. Tony Noland23 October 2011 at 20:53

    It could certainly be worse. He could have been doing online stock trading as a second job.

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  20. Chuck Allen23 October 2011 at 23:14

    I love the awkward moment when he first shows up to dance! And I love the happy ending.

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  21. Cat Russell25 October 2011 at 03:40

    A happy ending! How shocking! :)

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  22. liminalfiction25 October 2011 at 04:24

    Now there's a story that wouldn't end as happily if the genders were reversed (is that a sexist thought, or just a realistic one?). Loved this story, particularly that the husband/stripper turned out to have good intentions.

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