tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6396788184066846681.post7870493548804902975..comments2024-03-23T15:28:15.198+00:00Comments on Icy's Blunt Pencil: Friday Flash - LateIcy Sedgwickhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/11501193571425442406noreply@blogger.comBlogger18125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6396788184066846681.post-43173651977998776132011-10-20T00:59:07.928+01:002011-10-20T00:59:07.928+01:00Beautiful twist! I am thinking the old man was an ...Beautiful twist! I am thinking the old man was an angel. Also, really like the description of the train car.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6396788184066846681.post-55309831466469197312011-10-17T20:43:17.753+01:002011-10-17T20:43:17.753+01:00That's great. Almost life reaffirming great.That's great. Almost life reaffirming great.Raven Corinn Carlukhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06014248975870886289noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6396788184066846681.post-42355505046410711912011-10-17T20:13:53.764+01:002011-10-17T20:13:53.764+01:00I knew a twist was coming, but that's not what...I knew a twist was coming, but that's not what I expected at all. Beautifully written as always, Ms. Icy.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6396788184066846681.post-51117518554153343682011-10-17T14:54:11.153+01:002011-10-17T14:54:11.153+01:00Wow. I love this. A great twist - I had a feelin...Wow. I love this. A great twist - I had a feeling that things weren't what they seemed, but never guessed that. Also, quite a feel-goos ending. No matter how bad things get, you never know what's around the corner.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6396788184066846681.post-77871758505574909272011-10-17T04:21:52.962+01:002011-10-17T04:21:52.962+01:00Loved this, Icy. Even as I saw what he intended, e...Loved this, Icy. Even as I saw what he intended, even as I watched his plan going awry, the phone call was a welcome relief. One never knows if an HEA is in the works, after all. The feather was a lovely touch. Such a pleasure to read. Thanks, Icy.<br /><br />Take care,<br />JCAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6396788184066846681.post-56999577466129935202011-10-16T23:18:12.869+01:002011-10-16T23:18:12.869+01:00A lovely twist, providing hope in such a bleak sit...A lovely twist, providing hope in such a bleak situation. Rereading gives me the creeps when you think about what he was going to do, but moments of divine intervention bring joy.<br />Adam B @revhappinessAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6396788184066846681.post-79553399227230970042011-10-16T06:53:49.663+01:002011-10-16T06:53:49.663+01:00"...A handful of people sat in their bus seat..."...A handful of people sat in their bus seats, dead eyes staring into space. Early mornings will do that to you..."<br /><br />This really set the tone for this piece. Even so, I was caught off guard by the final clause. I had to go back and look again at the train, the bridge and where Mr. Johnson was standing.<br /><br />Great story Icy.KjMhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17691028465137798738noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6396788184066846681.post-40528677499497641862011-10-15T22:54:19.185+01:002011-10-15T22:54:19.185+01:00Tony - Glad you liked it. And I like wrong-footing...Tony - Glad you liked it. And I like wrong-footing people.<br /><br />Sam - Glad you liked it!<br /><br />Tim - I love Sliding Doors!<br /><br />FAR - Ah, rightio! He calls Pippa 'child' a lot in my Chinese Whisperings story and I guess I carried it over!<br /><br />John - It's just something to bear in mind...you never know what's around the corner.<br /><br />Craig - I've been one of those lonely commuters out in the pre-dawn, and I've often thought that's when the apocalypse would kick off!<br /><br />Aidan - Thanks.<br /><br />Helen - Sometimes we do have to stop hurrying.<br /><br />Stephen - I've been in that position, waiting for a call about a job that I thought would never come, but thankfully I've never felt the need to catch the train.<br /><br />Justin - There's a bit more to ol' JR...but I have a feeling we'll be seeing more of him.Icy Sedgwickhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11501193571425442406noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6396788184066846681.post-41925578315147618072011-10-15T18:30:57.940+01:002011-10-15T18:30:57.940+01:00The thing I love most about your story Icy, is tha...The thing I love most about your story Icy, is that the old guy teaches us that it's ok to sit (or stand, or lie) and look. Look at what other people are doing and how they are coping, taking some time just to contemplate and stop doing. He understands that and recognised someone in trouble. Perhaps because he'd been there himself?Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6396788184066846681.post-61490036544079285422011-10-15T14:06:24.441+01:002011-10-15T14:06:24.441+01:00Good thing for him that he missed the train. And a...Good thing for him that he missed the train. And a good thing that he finally landed the job. A nice story with a happy ending, Icy. The economy can certainly take its toll on people. I look forward to the day when things are brighter for everyone.Stephenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04753736809917062955noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6396788184066846681.post-24383401482666433832011-10-15T06:15:40.820+01:002011-10-15T06:15:40.820+01:00I think it's a good thing Mr. Coker held him u...I think it's a good thing Mr. Coker held him up - nice ending to the story.Helen A. Howellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12748128819820230841noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6396788184066846681.post-19531140794024785772011-10-15T02:25:24.262+01:002011-10-15T02:25:24.262+01:00When we discover he was considering suicide, it ca...When we discover he was considering suicide, it casts the earlier scene with the old man in a different light. As if the world cares in a way and works in mischievous ways.<br /><br />I agree with Craig, the apocalypse line was stellar.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14170148559429001125noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6396788184066846681.post-83103069584501312922011-10-14T18:29:49.439+01:002011-10-14T18:29:49.439+01:00It's odd how a stranger can change your day. I...It's odd how a stranger can change your day. I was glum, and walking through the street one day and someone said, "Hey, it's not the end of the world."<br /><br />Felt oddly better after that.<br /><br />Beautiful story and twist.<br /><br />"I'd often thought that the apocalypse would begin during that eerie pre-dawn, witnessed by no one but lonely commuters." - my favourite line :).Craig Smithhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07176851401465801580noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6396788184066846681.post-20499165633254455422011-10-14T16:41:15.258+01:002011-10-14T16:41:15.258+01:00Ha, that's what "my train" meant. I ...Ha, that's what "my train" meant. I didn't see that coming. In this economy, I can see how a good job is a miracle.John Wiswellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07416044628686736927noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6396788184066846681.post-40551146990873921902011-10-14T15:26:05.874+01:002011-10-14T15:26:05.874+01:00Brilliant twist indeed! Good thing Mr. Coker caugh...Brilliant twist indeed! Good thing Mr. Coker caught him before the train did.<br /><br />One thing: "child" is something a Deep South woman might say to a younger man, but not a man. He'd say "boy" or "fella."Larry Kollarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08317037795075278427noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6396788184066846681.post-87561068924055874742011-10-14T13:11:30.090+01:002011-10-14T13:11:30.090+01:00I was thinking "Sliding Doors" most of t...I was thinking "Sliding Doors" most of the way through. Great twist on this one.Tim VanSant Writeshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17614259042362664840noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6396788184066846681.post-74362810057702706412011-10-14T12:24:41.788+01:002011-10-14T12:24:41.788+01:00Oh wow, I hadn't realised that was why he was ...Oh wow, I hadn't realised that was why he was hurrying, that's a brilliant twist. Made me feel quite shaken up xxSam Penningtonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07985355742757891578noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6396788184066846681.post-40748432084156652312011-10-14T11:09:47.458+01:002011-10-14T11:09:47.458+01:00This was a great twist - caught me off guard. The ...This was a great twist - caught me off guard. The hurrying feel was pitch-perfect.Tony Nolandhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15090583562737225942noreply@blogger.com