tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6396788184066846681.post6270924083710560618..comments2024-03-23T15:28:15.198+00:00Comments on Icy's Blunt Pencil: Friday Flash - I Thought I Knew HimIcy Sedgwickhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/11501193571425442406noreply@blogger.comBlogger37125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6396788184066846681.post-13836080244783574052011-04-19T14:49:29.067+01:002011-04-19T14:49:29.067+01:00Oh this was just utterly fantastic! I still have c...Oh this was just utterly fantastic! I still have chills from reading it! GRREAT work Icy!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6396788184066846681.post-49942345391332302382011-04-18T23:17:56.249+01:002011-04-18T23:17:56.249+01:00Lovely conversational style of writing. It works r...Lovely conversational style of writing. It works really well and the ending is classy Icy. Love the little details. Great piece.<br />Adam B @revhappinessAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6396788184066846681.post-69706511628033903722011-04-17T20:00:14.956+01:002011-04-17T20:00:14.956+01:00Aidan - Yeah, she's one of my 'sadder'...Aidan - Yeah, she's one of my 'sadder' characters.<br /><br />Ian - Gee... *blushes*<br /><br />PJ - I do love my details!Icy Sedgwickhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11501193571425442406noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6396788184066846681.post-62418701701250407472011-04-17T18:53:08.357+01:002011-04-17T18:53:08.357+01:00Wonderful twist, Icy and beautiful little details ...Wonderful twist, Icy and beautiful little details sprinkled throughout :-)PJhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07521953491880916840noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6396788184066846681.post-64749798810975221952011-04-17T18:33:01.648+01:002011-04-17T18:33:01.648+01:00Late to the party, sorry.
But what a party - what...Late to the party, sorry.<br /><br />But what a party - what a great story. Pace that never lets up and a narrative that engages so quickly and so completely that the twist is a real hammer blow.<br /><br />Brilliant writing, Icy, but then I've come to expect nothing less.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6396788184066846681.post-24416931922746362612011-04-17T17:41:09.300+01:002011-04-17T17:41:09.300+01:00I'm not ghost but I can relate to seeing peopl...I'm not ghost but I can relate to seeing people thinking that I should know them somehow, but not being able to figure out why. She seems to have had a sad life. I particularly liked her reminiscence of Colt.AidanFhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09876041003278004627noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6396788184066846681.post-29023526272799841092011-04-16T22:43:47.555+01:002011-04-16T22:43:47.555+01:00Lara - I often find myself looking at someone and ...Lara - I often find myself looking at someone and wondering where I know them from but hopefully I'm not dead too.<br /><br />Al - Thanks!<br /><br />Raven - I tend to find I wander off on unrelated tangents when I think about certain people.<br /><br />Storytreasury - Glad you liked it!<br /><br />Kevin - Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it.<br /><br />Harry - The Devil is in the details! I usually spot random stuff, rather than the obvious, so my characters tend to do the same.<br /><br />Steve - I think I'd be sad too if I had to ride the same train every day for eternity.<br /><br />Helen - Teehee, glad the twist worked!<br /><br />Reginald - Well there always is at least one empty seat in a carriage...<br /><br />Tony - Ha, M.Night should stop writing movies and let me do it instead!<br /><br />Donald - Good! Glad you liked it!<br /><br />Danni - I've been experimenting more with misdirection...it's kind of fun!<br /><br />Cathy - Yeah, the opening sentence was from a text I actually sent someone on a train - I was convinced I knew the guy opposite but wasn't sure why. Glad you enjoyed it so much!<br /><br />Jason - You have to wonder how far her memories will actually degenerate, or if she'll end up wandering eternity with absolutely nothing for company. Gosh, that's a horrible thought.<br /><br />Virginia - Thanks!<br /><br />Stephen - I'm good with names and faces, but can never remember where I met them! So this will probably be me at some point in the hopefully distant future!<br /><br />Brainhaze - I'm glad you enjoyed it! I aim to please. ^_^Icy Sedgwickhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11501193571425442406noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6396788184066846681.post-40534201526715778302011-04-16T17:30:34.868+01:002011-04-16T17:30:34.868+01:00This is brilliant - I love it so much I read it tw...This is brilliant - I love it so much I read it twice. Great work Icy. This could easily be expanded into the beginning of a novel. The constant changing and making the reader switch its perspective on the different characters, never gives you a chance to actually think what the girl who is questioning who they are is doing there...brilliantAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6396788184066846681.post-83005887354998655082011-04-16T10:43:13.583+01:002011-04-16T10:43:13.583+01:00I liked the gradual change in her concept of the d...I liked the gradual change in her concept of the different characters she may or may not be remembering, and a great idea as a symptom of being dead. <br /><br />Given my memory for names and faces, I may already be dead. lol.<br /><br />Very well written, Icy. <br />St.Stephenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10111660663883108862noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6396788184066846681.post-41586004144749648192011-04-16T10:18:06.992+01:002011-04-16T10:18:06.992+01:00Loved this.Excellent ending.Loved this.Excellent ending.Virginia Moffatthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12071059148315715405noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6396788184066846681.post-23379037231881265612011-04-16T05:33:45.721+01:002011-04-16T05:33:45.721+01:00Being trapped for eternity with nothing but your m...Being trapped for eternity with nothing but your memories for company is horrible prospect enough, but when those memories degenerate as they are here now that's plain scary. Early on-set Alzheimer's is no joke if you're a spectre.Jason Cogginshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09509338964933754054noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6396788184066846681.post-29134397467351518142011-04-16T03:44:45.923+01:002011-04-16T03:44:45.923+01:00Icy, that was just fantastic! I loved and adored i...Icy, that was just fantastic! I loved and adored it, seriously interesting... at first, the "not knowing how she knew someone" - so interesting and realistic. And then the ending; completely unexpected and glorious. Wow! Peg this as one of my favourites of yours!Cathy Olliffe-Websterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12729578896443750402noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6396788184066846681.post-48161102370916857442011-04-16T03:15:29.865+01:002011-04-16T03:15:29.865+01:00Another great one, Icy. You pulled us in one direc...Another great one, Icy. You pulled us in one direction then flipped it at the end. I love that. I saw your comment to John & Rear Window is one of my favorites.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6396788184066846681.post-24657573121841206462011-04-16T02:47:30.345+01:002011-04-16T02:47:30.345+01:00Great bit of flash here, lovely use of misdirectio...Great bit of flash here, lovely use of misdirection. Thanks, I enjoyed it.Donald Conradhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11299995538611948494noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6396788184066846681.post-4745511005755316732011-04-16T02:20:11.034+01:002011-04-16T02:20:11.034+01:00I agree with Sam - the terrific misdirection caugh...I agree with Sam - the terrific misdirection caught me completely off-guard. Well done!Tony Nolandhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15090583562737225942noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6396788184066846681.post-35429062589130476472011-04-16T01:32:47.189+01:002011-04-16T01:32:47.189+01:00This one left me with a chill; I love to think thi...This one left me with a chill; I love to think this kind of thing happens every day...Reginald Goldinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14614046729112134242noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6396788184066846681.post-19169832051118736032011-04-15T23:35:25.438+01:002011-04-15T23:35:25.438+01:00Nice twist! I never guessed it., I thought the pie...Nice twist! I never guessed it., I thought the piece was going in a whole different direction. Good writing.Helen A. Howellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12748128819820230841noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6396788184066846681.post-46755037567367190432011-04-15T21:43:59.467+01:002011-04-15T21:43:59.467+01:00As Sam already commented, great misdirection, and ...As Sam already commented, great misdirection, and a nice twist in the end.<br /><br />I felt a deep sadness, and sense of confusion in the protagonist.Steve Greenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18414279461366098783noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6396788184066846681.post-80076930134192539072011-04-15T20:56:19.565+01:002011-04-15T20:56:19.565+01:00Spooky cool piece with your usual flair for intere...Spooky cool piece with your usual flair for interesting details. I particularly liked the, "woman pirouetting on a roof terrace"<br /><br />Great work Icy!Harryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09628269009060185397noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6396788184066846681.post-8777504308563474132011-04-15T19:46:18.927+01:002011-04-15T19:46:18.927+01:00Excellent story and some really vivid images. Thi...Excellent story and some really vivid images. This took me somewhere I hadn't anticipated - nice twist...totally unexpected and very well done.<br />KMKevin Michaelshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00703125974467675009noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6396788184066846681.post-69930034692478880082011-04-15T19:04:00.499+01:002011-04-15T19:04:00.499+01:00Really nice twist at the end there. I wasn't e...Really nice twist at the end there. I wasn't expecting her to be a ghost.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6396788184066846681.post-67764481536623203262011-04-15T18:56:26.196+01:002011-04-15T18:56:26.196+01:00That's some wallop there at the end. Love the ...That's some wallop there at the end. Love the build up, and the meandering remembrances.Raven Corinn Carlukhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06014248975870886289noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6396788184066846681.post-53002001065153898722011-04-15T18:07:35.642+01:002011-04-15T18:07:35.642+01:00Nice job!Nice job!https://www.blogger.com/profile/09492062472206579391noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6396788184066846681.post-51654950973182263232011-04-15T17:00:54.414+01:002011-04-15T17:00:54.414+01:00I like the thought process of the characters and t...I like the thought process of the characters and the ending that is a zinger.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6396788184066846681.post-51587742130861882942011-04-15T16:33:49.812+01:002011-04-15T16:33:49.812+01:00Justin - I don't think she's angry per se,...Justin - I don't think she's angry per se, more just bored. And it's not weird at all! <br /><br />Deanna - Originally it was going to end with her realising she didn't know the woman either but the protagonist just kept talking...<br /><br />John - It was my ever-so-subtle nod to <i>Rear Window</i> (see, Hitchcock does make an appearance everywhere!) And yep, Crouch End does exist. <a href="http://www.crouch-end.com/" rel="nofollow">http://www.crouch-end.com/</a> Home to <i>Shaun of the Dead</i>!Icy Sedgwickhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11501193571425442406noreply@blogger.com