tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6396788184066846681.post4903767945262881472..comments2023-06-12T13:43:01.685+01:00Comments on Icy's Blunt Pencil: Friday Flash - Dead Man's Hand IIcy Sedgwickhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/11501193571425442406noreply@blogger.comBlogger28125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6396788184066846681.post-74694289477525704132011-03-06T12:43:48.402+00:002011-03-06T12:43:48.402+00:00I can see why the Blackjack Bud would be offended ...I can see why the Blackjack Bud would be offended with that kind of language! Edmund should have been careful when he saw the marks of a past brawl.<br />On to part2.Ruchira Mandalhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13508463317343812174noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6396788184066846681.post-30431790999893358982011-03-06T12:39:55.833+00:002011-03-06T12:39:55.833+00:00Black lips, grey teeth, star-eyes? Oh my God! I do...Black lips, grey teeth, star-eyes? Oh my God! I don't understand cards at all, but this hooked me right at the beginning.Ruchira Mandalhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13508463317343812174noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6396788184066846681.post-44994229868157934132011-03-05T21:26:00.639+00:002011-03-05T21:26:00.639+00:00I found myself trying to cheat and skipped to the ...I found myself trying to cheat and skipped to the end, but the horror of missing the best kept me faithful. How vivid and hooking. I saw Blackjack Bud's every expression and I felt when he was slashed on the face. Great job at taking me there.<br /><br />Can't wait to see what happens next!Magaly Guerrerohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18295455026184103230noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6396788184066846681.post-9822434880731830922011-02-25T17:09:09.001+00:002011-02-25T17:09:09.001+00:00Love it!!!
A) I'm desperately afraid of ever ...Love it!!!<br />A) I'm desperately afraid of ever ending up with this hand in a game of poker.<br />B) I love Edmund and how easily he offends. "I consider you a natural raconteur and easy wit." Love it!<br />c) I love the lady in the death coach- so much imagery there- the millions of tiny stars in her eyes, the voice like a "thousand flies around a caracss". Really well done!Bevimushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14924337684790883853noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6396788184066846681.post-57401494006841254452011-02-22T18:05:37.975+00:002011-02-22T18:05:37.975+00:00Fantastic writing Icy. It flows so well and moves ...Fantastic writing Icy. It flows so well and moves at a perfect pace. I too love the contrast between the modes of speech. Who is this mysterious woman and why does her face fall? Western to afterlife story in one shot. Marvellous.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6396788184066846681.post-27014240366487299002011-02-22T00:19:06.027+00:002011-02-22T00:19:06.027+00:00oooooooo, good story, Icy! I liked Edmond and was ...oooooooo, good story, Icy! I liked Edmond and was sad he was dead... until I realized the story was really just beginning. Yummy! Looking forward to it!Cathy Olliffe-Websterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12729578896443750402noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6396788184066846681.post-28906681036755834582011-02-20T21:59:25.224+00:002011-02-20T21:59:25.224+00:00An excellent start to a trilogy, I'd say. Look...An excellent start to a trilogy, I'd say. Looking forward to the follow up stories.Lauritahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03688820247531607677noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6396788184066846681.post-39326121529691210262011-02-20T19:24:11.037+00:002011-02-20T19:24:11.037+00:00Hey there! I've got an award for you back at R...Hey there! I've got an award for you back at Randomities. :) http://bit.ly/bunch_awardsMarihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07303695124956391293noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6396788184066846681.post-83429911752908140072011-02-20T05:09:53.091+00:002011-02-20T05:09:53.091+00:00Smashing dialogue and even an Englishman is able t...Smashing dialogue and even an Englishman is able to play a little dirty. Good to see Lady Death back in the action. I reckon she could be a graphic novel character, too.<br />Adam B @revhappinessAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6396788184066846681.post-10730619746013535862011-02-19T19:56:12.522+00:002011-02-19T19:56:12.522+00:00Great feel, Icy. The slash across the face was vis...Great feel, Icy. The slash across the face was visceral.Tony Nolandhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15090583562737225942noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6396788184066846681.post-65125317304171614642011-02-19T19:53:44.807+00:002011-02-19T19:53:44.807+00:00I loved the dialogue in this - all the way to Edmu...I loved the dialogue in this - all the way to Edmund cursing himself for not burying his knife in Blackjack's gun hand.<br /><br />Nice story to that point, and then the arrival of the midnight-haired young woman just kicked it up another notch.<br /><br />Excellent stuff.KjMhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17691028465137798738noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6396788184066846681.post-5131848648660433932011-02-19T19:41:36.885+00:002011-02-19T19:41:36.885+00:00Nice. I love the description of her voice, too. Ve...Nice. I love the description of her voice, too. Very creepy, indeed. I'm looking forward to seeing where this one leads.Stephenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04753736809917062955noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6396788184066846681.post-2369129116415176892011-02-19T17:03:45.803+00:002011-02-19T17:03:45.803+00:00There was no way that tough gambler was going to a...There was no way that tough gambler was going to accept losing to an overedumacated Enlish fop.<br /><br />Good dialogue and scene-setting Icy, and I love the ghostly ending.Steve Greenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18414279461366098783noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6396788184066846681.post-52704130143542674752011-02-19T15:09:23.291+00:002011-02-19T15:09:23.291+00:00Eric - I've found myself really enjoying writi...Eric - I've found myself really enjoying writing Westerns of late, but yeah, I had to provoke a few wry smiles!<br /><br />Mari - He didn't actually cheat, but he is a bit smug.<br /><br />Harry - The dialogue was the most fun part to write!<br /><br />Aidan - I'm glad you liked it.<br /><br />Rachel - I love my mysterious lady. She pops up from time to time to remind me to do something with her.Icy Sedgwickhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11501193571425442406noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6396788184066846681.post-89842713307105480192011-02-19T06:34:56.416+00:002011-02-19T06:34:56.416+00:00Excellent story. Perfect characters, setting and d...Excellent story. Perfect characters, setting and dialog. I can tell you really enjoyed writing this, because it shows in every line. And the mysterious lady in the end...shivers.Rachel Blackbirdsonghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02246966713076881105noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6396788184066846681.post-7346827996182858882011-02-19T03:57:58.129+00:002011-02-19T03:57:58.129+00:00I enjoyed the verbal wordplay between these two an...I enjoyed the verbal wordplay between these two and then the fade into the supernatural was a nice ending; even if I was sad that he had to get shot.AidanFhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09876041003278004627noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6396788184066846681.post-30955679377076369302011-02-18T20:10:08.381+00:002011-02-18T20:10:08.381+00:00Loved this Icy! Very interesting reading a Londone...Loved this Icy! Very interesting reading a Londoner's western where the cowboy has trouble understanding the king's English. :) Great dialog there, cool characters and ideas. As usual, staying tuned!Harryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09628269009060185397noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6396788184066846681.post-20479741663697191972011-02-18T19:24:26.981+00:002011-02-18T19:24:26.981+00:00Eyes filled with stars? I'll have to check out...Eyes filled with stars? I'll have to check out the other stories then! <br /><br />I say Edmund poses like a gentlemen, but he asked for what he got, cheating or not. Great story, Icy!Marihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07303695124956391293noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6396788184066846681.post-38974557210637517812011-02-18T17:13:39.283+00:002011-02-18T17:13:39.283+00:00I really enjoyed this one. Great humor early on be...I really enjoyed this one. Great humor early on before it all hit the fan. And it looks like his adventure is just beginning.Eric J. Krausehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05774468607814244185noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6396788184066846681.post-31631345414751733032011-02-18T16:50:13.236+00:002011-02-18T16:50:13.236+00:00Janet - She's my Lady Death. She pops up perio...Janet - She's my Lady Death. She pops up periodically when she gets bored.<br /><br />FAR - He's in my current novella, as it happens.<br /><br />Catherine - It's something I'm working on for a future project so thought I'd start now!<br /><br />John - My WIP is a Western and I've been reading up on the Old West...it certainly grips the imagination.<br /><br />Raven - If there's only thing I love writing, it's Victorian English!<br /><br />Marc - Edmund felt the need to point out the obvious as Blackjack Bud isn't the sharpest tool in the box.<br /><br />Chris - Oh, I loved writing it!<br /><br />ibc4 - Thank you for the comments! I guess that's how I pictured it in my head so that's how I wrote it, but I could always take another look at it.Icy Sedgwickhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11501193571425442406noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6396788184066846681.post-84918800084834134182011-02-18T09:25:32.485+00:002011-02-18T09:25:32.485+00:00Fantastic writing again, Icy.
The fish out of wat...Fantastic writing again, Icy.<br /><br />The fish out of water device beautifully twisted. The Edwardian gentleman straight from his Club in Gower Street, the hardened, gun-toting Westerner immediately recognisable from his Wanted poster.<br /><br />Playing cards. Perfect.<br /><br />I thought you handled the dialogue well; there must have been a temptation to overdo the English gags but you held a tight rein. <br /><br />If I may critique one tiny area: the descriptive words in the saloon and final para were lovely, delectable, delicious - for the gunfight, I wonder, did they affect the pace a little? The concentration on detail during that scene was visual and if that was the intention then I withdraw the comment, but as a reader, I wanted to snap from look to look, from hand to gun to shot, to shock. Really punch your way through the action. <br /><br />Just a thought. But another superb piece! I do enjoy reading your Flash.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6396788184066846681.post-60700056797350217892011-02-18T09:22:47.461+00:002011-02-18T09:22:47.461+00:00Love it! I can tell you had a lot of fun writing t...Love it! I can tell you had a lot of fun writing this :)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6396788184066846681.post-71532166596762146802011-02-18T09:11:11.337+00:002011-02-18T09:11:11.337+00:00This was hilarious, a real fun read "But this...This was hilarious, a real fun read "But this is poker" was a ROFLMA moment. I know exactly how Edmund feels sometimes.<br /><br />Marc NashSulci Collectivehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03293833259808943096noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6396788184066846681.post-57439727650894650042011-02-18T04:51:38.320+00:002011-02-18T04:51:38.320+00:00Awesome awesome stuff. I love the way Edmund talks...Awesome awesome stuff. I love the way Edmund talks.Raven Corinn Carlukhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06014248975870886289noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6396788184066846681.post-16845499996171428012011-02-18T04:13:34.205+00:002011-02-18T04:13:34.205+00:00I perked up at "saloon." Very little in ...I perked up at "saloon." Very little in the way of even vaguely Western #fridayflash. Jon Strother better come out and give it a look.John Wiswellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07416044628686736927noreply@blogger.com